The Shortcut
My brother and I were walking through the woods one Halloween day when we saw
what appeared to be a short-cut. "Let's go that way," my brother said, while pointing
down a trail that lead into the dark woods. “Maybe we should just stick to the path,”
I said. “No, we’ll get home faster by going this way. The faster we get home the more
time we have to eat our candy,” he said giving me a sly look. “Okay,” I say giving into
his temptation.
what appeared to be a short-cut. "Let's go that way," my brother said, while pointing
down a trail that lead into the dark woods. “Maybe we should just stick to the path,”
I said. “No, we’ll get home faster by going this way. The faster we get home the more
time we have to eat our candy,” he said giving me a sly look. “Okay,” I say giving into
his temptation.
As we start walking we hear a wolf howl at the full moon that is lighting the trail. I
start walking closer to my brother. “You’ll be fine,” he says walking at a bit faster
pace than me. Then we heard a twig snap. “AAAAHHHH,” we both screamed
hugging each other. Then a rabbit ran out of the bush in front of us.
“Well, that surprised me,” my brother said while dusting off his shirt.
“Let’s keep moving.”
start walking closer to my brother. “You’ll be fine,” he says walking at a bit faster
pace than me. Then we heard a twig snap. “AAAAHHHH,” we both screamed
hugging each other. Then a rabbit ran out of the bush in front of us.
“Well, that surprised me,” my brother said while dusting off his shirt.
“Let’s keep moving.”
Then no joke we heard footsteps coming from somewhere in the woods, followed by a
low growl. We both walked faster, then we heard a high pitched “AAAAHHHH,” we
both started running. The footsteps got louder and faster. Once we were out of the
forest and the footsteps were nowhere to be heard we collapsed onto each other.
Breathlessly I said “Let’s never to that again.”
low growl. We both walked faster, then we heard a high pitched “AAAAHHHH,” we
both started running. The footsteps got louder and faster. Once we were out of the
forest and the footsteps were nowhere to be heard we collapsed onto each other.
Breathlessly I said “Let’s never to that again.”
“Agreed,” my brother said looking at me with grin on his face.
Great Story! I liked the how you took the sentence starter and made a suspenseful story. One thing you could do is make it longer. But other than that it was awesome.
ReplyDeleteI love your story! One thing you can do is adding more detail. I liked how the sister and brother hugged each other when they got scared! And you have a point on the "never do that again" part. The story is really good!
ReplyDeleteThat was super good! I liked how it was just the rabbit that popped out! :)
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