The Noise
By: Alexa Harrell
I took off my Halloween costume, washed the paint off my face, put on my pajamas,
brushed my teeth, and went to bed. I was almost asleep when I first heard the sound,
a light tapping noise. At first I thought it was just my mind playing tricks on me, but
about a minute later I heard the sound again accompanied by scratching. Once
again, I told myself that it was probably nothing. After a few minutes of not hearing
the sound, I finally nodded off into a light sleep.
brushed my teeth, and went to bed. I was almost asleep when I first heard the sound,
a light tapping noise. At first I thought it was just my mind playing tricks on me, but
about a minute later I heard the sound again accompanied by scratching. Once
again, I told myself that it was probably nothing. After a few minutes of not hearing
the sound, I finally nodded off into a light sleep.
I was drowned by darkness. I looked up, or at least what I thought was up.
I started to hear the tapping again, except this time it was accompanied by
a low, raspy whisper. I couldn’t make out the words well enough to make
sense of them. But it scared me enough to encourage me to at least try to find
a way out of the darkness. I jumped up and stuck my hands out in front of me,
I took a step when everything around me changed. I was in a dimly lit room this
time, it was empty with no doors. I started to hear the whispering again, I
whipped around and saw the most terrifying thing in the world. A man with
chunks of his flesh missing on his face, and he held a pocket knife in his hand.
I could finally hear what he was saying, “I’m going to get you.” he said, as he
started to run towards me. I jolted awake, sweat dripping from my forehead. I
looked at my alarm clock, it read 6:37. I decided to just get ready for the day
because there was no way that I was ever going to fall back asleep after that
nightmare.
I started to hear the tapping again, except this time it was accompanied by
a low, raspy whisper. I couldn’t make out the words well enough to make
sense of them. But it scared me enough to encourage me to at least try to find
a way out of the darkness. I jumped up and stuck my hands out in front of me,
I took a step when everything around me changed. I was in a dimly lit room this
time, it was empty with no doors. I started to hear the whispering again, I
whipped around and saw the most terrifying thing in the world. A man with
chunks of his flesh missing on his face, and he held a pocket knife in his hand.
I could finally hear what he was saying, “I’m going to get you.” he said, as he
started to run towards me. I jolted awake, sweat dripping from my forehead. I
looked at my alarm clock, it read 6:37. I decided to just get ready for the day
because there was no way that I was ever going to fall back asleep after that
nightmare.
A few months later while I was cleaning the window in my room, I saw what looked
like scratches. At first it just looked like a few random scratches, but when I looked
closer at it, I realized that it was 7 small words. “Don’t worry, I’ll get you next Halloween.”
like scratches. At first it just looked like a few random scratches, but when I looked
closer at it, I realized that it was 7 small words. “Don’t worry, I’ll get you next Halloween.”
Good job! I really loved all of your descriptions and how you made it seem like it was really happening. One thing you could do to make it better is make it longer. Great job though!
ReplyDeleteAwesome Story! I liked how you made it seem like she was actually living the dream and I liked the suspense too! One thing you could change is making the dream a little bit longer. And adding more to it. But other than that it was great!
ReplyDeleteWow! Good work! I really liked the way you put all of that together in one small story! I think you could have made it a little bit longer with the dream... I loved the way that you left your story at a cliffhanger! (;
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