Tap...
I was stuck at home all by myself. It was Halloween night, but Mom had said that I was
too old for trick-or-treating. I had to cancel on my group costume because she won’t
too old for trick-or-treating. I had to cancel on my group costume because she won’t
let me go out. (this doesn’t give my mom good parenting points) I’m only 13, and you’re
never too old for anything.( I was not very happy with my mother at this time).
never too old for anything.( I was not very happy with my mother at this time).
This night was already kind of crappy, then I heard the tapping…
Now tapping is already creepy but when you’re home alone on HALLOWEEN NIGHT
no less it’s 10x scarier. At first i ignored it but of course you can’t ignore something forever so
eventually I was so curious I got up and started looking around to try and find
no less it’s 10x scarier. At first i ignored it but of course you can’t ignore something forever so
eventually I was so curious I got up and started looking around to try and find
the origin of the noise. I looked for about 5 mins (being a lazy tween that’s all I could handle)
Needless to say i couldn’t find it. It stopped for a while, but when i heard it again it was louder
and closer and of course scarier.
Needless to say i couldn’t find it. It stopped for a while, but when i heard it again it was louder
and closer and of course scarier.
There have been many bad things happen at this new house and even though many
people told us it was haunted my mom loved it so much she bought it anyway.
people told us it was haunted my mom loved it so much she bought it anyway.
I like the house I just don’t like the history, people have reported ghosts and eerie vibes
from our house and so the tapping shouldn’t have come as a surprise to me but it did and
it was even more of a surprise when i found the origin… it was literally my dog, my brand
new puppy, he scared me the whole night. At least I’m hoping it was my dog…
from our house and so the tapping shouldn’t have come as a surprise to me but it did and
it was even more of a surprise when i found the origin… it was literally my dog, my brand
new puppy, he scared me the whole night. At least I’m hoping it was my dog…
-Brinley baker
It was very funny and very relatable and i really liked the suspense at the end but a thing id change next time is to use different punctuation's like exclamation marks but it was really good
ReplyDeleteThis is a good story. Next time Try not to forget to Capitalize I when it is alone in a sentence.
ReplyDeleteLove this! haha! It was kinda funny but kinda creepy at the same time. Next time just don forget to capitalize the I´s in your sentences and don´t forget the tab before your paragraph. Love ya!
ReplyDeleteI really like your story, make sure you capitalize your I's.
ReplyDeleteGood Job. Remember to capitalize your I's
ReplyDeleteGreat job, I really liked this. I don't think there's much more you should change but maybe just add a bit more detail or something of the sort.
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