Wednesday, September 26, 2018

The Baker Bunch
Mostly just brinley
Scene 1
Brinley thinking to herself “It’s friday night which means it’s almost  swiss days which
means i’m performing soon…(dozes off)
I wake up and tell my parents that I don’t really want to go to the parade so
they work it out for one of them to come pick me up soooo everything works out
I get all ready for the performance, my dad comes and picks me up… I get to
swiss days I’m ready and excited to perform. I find my friends easily and we
wait for our turn to go on. It’s finally our turn...we nailed that performance!!!
(all though three people basically fainted)
(Audience chuckles)
(screen goes black)
Scene 2
Still at swiss days
I was tired and hungry and just wanted to go home but the rest of my family
did NOT feel the same so they obviously outnumbered me and my choice was ruled out.
So I stayed with my family while my dad and brother did a three-point contest
(neither of them won lol)(but my dad got ten and my brother only got six)
I was NOT in a good mood
My dad and sister wanted to go home too but whatever my mom says goes
Anyway it went pretty well.


(end card)
Anyway this was some of my saturday

-Brinley Baker

4 comments:

  1. Good job! I really liked how you put in the little details like what score your dad and brother got. The only thing i would change is try to be more descriptive!

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  2. That was a really good post! The only thing you could changes would be just making sure everything made sense. I really liked it!!

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  3. I liked how you expressed the feelings with the exclamation points and bold letters. Next time try to keep it in one tense.

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  4. Hey Brinley! I liked how you showed what you were thinking! Something you could do to improve is tell us what you were performing at Swiss days.

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