scene 1
(scene opens to alarm clock going off at 7:10)
RIINGGG!!!! RIINGGG!!!!
Britni(Maizi's mom): Come on Maizi!!! It's 7:10! Get up!!
Maizi:(Still half asleep) Okay, Okay
Britni: Get Up!!
Maizi: Im up, Im up
(Maizi stumbles out of her bed and heads to her closet to get dressed.)
Britni: Maizi I gotta head out. You gonna be okay?
Maizi: Ok. Yeah I'll be fine
(Maizi enters the kitchen wearing pj bottoms and a dress)
Maizi: Okay, I gotta leave here in 10 minuets if I want make it to school on time.
(Maizi grabs her backpack and runs out the door.)
Voice plays over the intercom: Students remember that today is picture day so look your best!!
Maizi: Its PICTURE DAY!!! Oh No!
(Maizi takes a look in the bathroom mirror and notices that her hair is a mess and she is wearing mismatched socks with flip-flops, and a dress with pj bottoms)
Maizi: This is great! Just Great!
Scene 2
(Maizi is in hall heading to 3rd period and trips over her dress.
Maizi:OUUCHHH!! I just fell on my nose!!
(A teacher walks up to her and takes her to the office.)
1 hour later
(Maizi returns with a broken nose and a neck brace, And heads to the little theater.)
Maizi: Ummmm..... I'm here to take me picture.
Photographer: Okay come over here with me, sweetie
Maizi:ok
(Maizi sits down, trying to smile)
Photographer: Say Cheese!
Maizi:Wait
FLASH!!!
Photographer: K,looks good
Maizi: But, I wasn't ready.
Photographer:NEXT!!
2 hours later
(Maizi recevies her picture.)
Maizi: Look at this, my hair is sticking up and I'm not even smiling plus I'm in mid-blink!
Fast forward 6 months to them receving their yearbooks.
(Maizi flips to nominates for that year.)
Maizi: Im nominated for most likely to be having a bad day?! Well I guess they were right!
THE END!
Your writing was organized. I thought it was good, because it was like I could see the episode playing out in my head. What would it look like if the genre of the show was written in smaller letters under the title.
ReplyDeleteWow Maizi that was really good! I loved how you descried what you were wearing and I love how you made it super funny. When you said "1 hour later" maybe you could have done that as Scene 3. But other than that it was amazing!
ReplyDeleteThis was so funny! I loved your description on how the character looked! I could see it in my mind. One thing I noticed though, was that your spacing was different at the very end. I thought the story was so funny!
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ReplyDeleteI really like how you put this all together to make it funny. I liked how you described what she was wearing and what she looked like after everything happened. One thing you could of done was add something in where your mom sees it an gets madd about a few things.
ReplyDeleteYour story was really great and I loved how you described things and i could picture it in my head. You could have added some more effects but otherwise it was great.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you made the effects, it was good because of all the exclamation marks. A way to improve this is to not make the font look thin. It be better if you used a thicker font. That way it'll be easier to read!!!!!!!!!!!!
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That was great and funny! I could picture everything because you described it so well. I wouldnt change anything!
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