My
Three Brothers
A sometimes funny, sometimes frustrating, but always true story.
Scene 1:
(It’s only7:08 am when
Piper’s younger brother Finn starts screaming.)
Finn: HAYDEN GIVE ME THE T.V. REMOTE BACK!
Hayden: I will--if you stop being annoying.
Piper: Would you two stop yelling? It’s a Saturday morning
and I was planning on sleeping in!
(Piper walks into the
kitchen to eat breakfast)
Piper: Wait, where are the Pop tarts?
Hayden: Skylar ate
all of them.
Piper: Are you kidding me?!? I hid the brand new box from
him, and yet, I still don’t get any?
Fine. I’ll just have cereal.
Hayden: Only Skylar ate that too.
Scene 2:
(Piper walks upstairs
to go take a long, hot shower.)
Finn: I call dibs on the first shower!
Hayden: Well I was just about to get in!
Skylar: Um…Sorry everyone. I need it first. My friends and I are having a
Super Smash Bros. Tournament at Abe’s. Plus I’m the oldest. I should have automatically have everything first.
Piper: Okay then. I guess I will have to wait. Again.
(One hour later, Piper
finally gets her turn for the shower. She
turns the nozzle…)
Piper: AHHHHHHH! The water is FREEZING! Ughhhh!
(Piper gets out of the
shower only to find all of the towels are sitting on the floor, soaking wet)
Piper: Shoot. Mom?
Anyone? Can you bring me a dry towel?
Scene 3:
(Music is blasting from
Piper’s Echo Dot while she finally gets ready for the day.)
Hayden: Hey Finn, I have an idea.
(Finn and Hayden secretly
whispering)
Piper (annoyed): I know what you two are doing.
Finn and Hayden: Tehehehehe!!!
(Piper’s echo dot
randomly changes songs while Finn is booking it upstairs)
Finn: Did you like the song?
Scene 4:
(Finn and Hayden got
bored of bothering Piper. They switched to video games.)
Piper: Finally some peace and quiet. Maybe I’ll read.
Hayden (yelling through his gaming headphones): What the
heck? We could’ve gotten a dub but you didn’t
shoot FortnightPlayer.67 fast enough!
Piper: Seriously. I can’t
get a break—can I?
The EndJ!
I have two brothers and they are so annoying. One thing i would of changed was maybe make it a little longer. But it was really good and funny.
ReplyDeleteThis is the funniest thing! I might have wanted to make it longer, but I probably would've forgotten.
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness!!! This is so so good!! I loved this story and the way you put it together! You're so clever!! I love it how you kept each "scene" so organized!!! One thing I would have changed would be to make it longer. But otherwise I loved reading that story!!!
ReplyDeleteGood job! I really liked your blog post and how you put it together. You did a really good job on making it easy to read and understand, and I liked how you tied it to your brothers. One thing you could've improved on is, maybe your punctuation and commas. All in all, it was a great story!
ReplyDeleteReally good description. I fight with my sibling too. Maybe add something funny instead of fighting. Really liked it.
ReplyDeleteI like how you describe eveything. You describe every detail in the scene, and for a reader it is fun to read something that is described just perfectly. Your writing is really fun to read! One thing it could use is to make it a little longer. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteGood job! I really liked how you made it funny and interesting. I loved your title and sub-title. The only thing I could think of to improve is to make it a little longer. Awesome job though!!!!
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