~Mornings 4 Us~
Genre: Realistic Fiction
Intro: 6:00 A.M Cue Music: (Sound of beeping alarm gradually getting louder for 30 sec.)
Scene #1
~ Lucy yawns and turns off her alarm. ~ "Yes! Today is early out!!" ~ Lucy says quietly as she gets out of bed. She turns on one of
her favorite morning playlists on her Echo Dot. She listens to the music while she does her morning routine. ~
her favorite morning playlists on her Echo Dot. She listens to the music while she does her morning routine. ~
Scene #2 7:00 A.M
~ Lucy is all ready for school with her hair done and her shoes on as she heads downstairs for breakfast. Lucy walks into the
kitchen where she finds her mom preparing her breakfast. ~
kitchen where she finds her mom preparing her breakfast. ~
Mom: "Good Morning Lu!!!"
Lucy: "Good morning Mom!"
Mom:“Did you sleep well?” Mom says as she spreads the strawberry honey butter on each half of the toasted bagel.
Lucy: "Yeah, how ‘bout you?"
Mom: "Um-hm!" She hums with a mouth full of a bite from the toasted bagel.
Mom: "Here is your bagel with your favorite honey butter flavor! Oh and I took a bite. Sorry I couldn’t resist it."
Lucy: "It's fine, thanks Mom!!"
Mom: "You should probably get going it’s 7:10 and you don’t want to miss the bus!!" Mom says as she hands Lucy her lunch box
and water bottle.
and water bottle.
Lucy: "K thanks Mom!" Lucy says as she puts her last handful of raspberries in her mouth.
Mom: “See you after school!" Mom says, giving Lucy a big hug.
Mom: “See you after school!" Mom says, giving Lucy a big hug.
Lucy: "Oh don’t forget that I get out of school at 11:45!!" Lucy says as she is walking toward the door.
Scene #3 7:15 A.M
~ Lucy glances at her watch to check the time and it is way past the time that her bus is supposed to come. So she starts
walking back to her house. Sooner or later she walks into the house and into the kitchen where she finds her mom and Oliver.
(Oliver is Lucy’s little brother who is in 5th grade) ~
walking back to her house. Sooner or later she walks into the house and into the kitchen where she finds her mom and Oliver.
(Oliver is Lucy’s little brother who is in 5th grade) ~
Lucy: “Hey Mom, the bus must have come a little earlier than it should have because I was on time to the stop and it never
showed up.” Lucy explains as she enters the kitchen.
showed up.” Lucy explains as she enters the kitchen.
Mom: "Oh that’s ok it happens."
Oliver: "Ha-ha! I'm not surprised." Oliver scoffs. Lucy ignores him.
Oliver: "Ha-ha! I'm not surprised." Oliver scoffs. Lucy ignores him.
Lucy: "Yeah… so can you take me to school right now?"
Mom: "Yeah I’ll take you as soon as Oliver finishes his breakfast."
Mom: "Oliver, quickly finish up, because we need to leave a little early so we can get the two of you to school on time," says
Mom to Oliver as he is eating his bagel.
Mom to Oliver as he is eating his bagel.
Oliver: "Yessss!! I just remembered that today we have a short day!" He says as he gets off of the bar stool and grabs his
lunch box, stuffs it into his backpack and zooms past Mom and Lucy.
lunch box, stuffs it into his backpack and zooms past Mom and Lucy.
Mom: "He is only willing to go to school when it is an early out," Mom said quietly to Lucy as she and Lucy follow him into the
garage where they all get into the car.
garage where they all get into the car.
Scene #4 7:30 A.M
~ Mom comes to a stop in front of the school and Lucy un-buckles her seat belt and gathers her things together.
Mom: "Just check with your bus driver to see if the time he comes to pick you up changed," Mom says as Lucy puts her
backpack on and grabs hold of her water bottle. ~
backpack on and grabs hold of her water bottle. ~
Lucy: "Ok thanks for the ride Mom!! See ya Oliver! Bye Mom!"
Oliver & Mom: "Bye Lucy, love you!!"
~ Lucy opens the school door and walks in. She finds her friends and starts chatting with them until the bell rings and
everyone departs into their own classrooms. ~
everyone departs into their own classrooms. ~
This was really good! I liked the way you used descriptive words! I would just make sure to check your grammar before publishing, other wise it was really good!
ReplyDeleteThat was super good! It was really good and just remember to use the right punctuation! I really liked reading it!
ReplyDeleteGreat work Lucy! I really liked how you put the exact time by the scenes. It made it so it was really easy to understand how much time it takes in the morning to get to school. I really related to when you were talking about your mom telling you to hurry and get to the bus before you miss it. That happens like every day. One thing I thought you could improve on is to make sure you start with a capital letter at the beginning of each sentence. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteThanks guys!!! I just edited it. Thank you for your suggestions!!!
ReplyDeleteHey Lucy! I really like all the detail you put in to each scene! Maybe you could add in why the bus driver was early/ late?
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