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I decided to interview my 8 year old sister, Charlotte. She is interviewing for a job at Burger King. Q: Why do you want to work here? ...
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I liked how you quoted your sources, it really made facts seem more interesting. I think the paragraph would be better if it was a bit longer.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used big words to make it sound more interesting and get your point across. One thing I think you could fix is maybe not use so many facts and quoted sources. All in all, nice job!
ReplyDeleteGood job! I really liked how you used fancy words that related to your topic, and how you made it more interesting to read. One thing you could fix is maybe not add as many facts. All in all, good job!
ReplyDeleteGreat! That was a great paragraph to read, I think you did a good job of telling why pumpkin pie is the best thanksgiving food. One thing you could work on is maybe not so much facts but more opinion. But in all great job!
ReplyDeleteI love the way this was written, it made it very interesting to read. Good job! However, I think for next time you could maybe not putting so much information.
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